Temat: Proszę o sprawdzenie mojego listu motywacyjnego
Some remarks and their explanation
I am writing to your XXX company directly(Name it!) ( ending "ing" is specific, thus you must direct to the person, company, etc), nevertheless you can say only "I write" since is general.
"for an internship position in your company." (name the position and the company AGAIN)
I am currently in the Second Year in Multimedia Design and Communication at the Copenhagen Business Academy.
After one year of studies and independent work I acquired skills to use software such as: Adobe Photoshop, Adobe Photoshop Lightroom, Adobe Illustrator, Adobe InDesign and Adobe Dreamweaver.
delete this line" as well as in projects that have performed there." is too much for a short presentation
change: I had attended two schools at the same time.
For: I accomplished two different studies graduated with honors each of them.
Delete this: This taught me to do different types of tasks in the most efficient manner.
change: During the study period, I made all the projects on time, each of them passed on the first attempt.
For:during my studies period I accomplished all projects on time, always with the best awards.
Change: For the company I can offer such features as responsibility and the ability to get an overall view of the project, that is why I often act as a group leader.
For: I can offer to XXXX company (name it!) I can offer the same quality of results ( and delete the rest, any company is looking for "bosses" but for "workers", unless specify)
Change: can very well manage the time in terms of the tasks assigned to me, but in spite of all the group work is very inspiring to me and I derive great satisfaction from it. I am also the person who can offer you an innovative way of looking at the problem.
For: I am skilly leading tasks times. I enjoy work in group and if needed I can take the leader responsibility, that drives me great satisfaction, looking always the situations in different points of view.
Not needed, delete it: "I always reflect recent trends in my
school projects. I can learn new things very quickly, and by this
I can improve my skills all the time. "
This part is great, but I think to many words for a short presentation... remember theat managers are busy and is more effective to write 15 lines than 50...
"In the spring time I started to look for a company where I would
like to apply for an internship. When I found DesignUnit I
immediately knew that this is the place where I would like to
work. I have not found any company with this kind of specific
style and aesthetics incorporated in the design and in the type of
the projects - a combination of design and fashion. In this
variety of projects I see the art, which is very creative. This is
exactly what I would like to learn and do in the future. The most
I enjoyed the project called Dansk Magazine Issue 27."
Thanks it all
I recommend you to be more attractive with few words... your goals if the personal meeting,remember it
Juan Castaneda
mail/video: hiszpanski.online@gmail.com
Skype: hiszpanski.online
Ewelina Sołowiej:
Witam!
Piszę z prośbą o sprawdzenie i ewentualne poprawienie błędów w moim liście motywacyjnym. Z góry także proszę o niezjedzenie mnie :D
Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to express my interest for an internship position in your company.
I am currently a second year Multimedia Design and Communication student at the Copenhagen Business Academy. After one year of education, and also after my independent work I acquired skills to use programs such as: Adobe Photoshop, Adobe Photoshop Lightroom, Adobe Illustrator, Adobe InDesign and Adobe Dreamweaver. Additionally, I am very well-versed in web development and web design. I also have a basic knowledge of JavaScript, PHP, jQuery, SQL and MySQL. Some of my skills can be seen on my website - portfolio, as well as in projects that have performed there. I am a well-organized and highly motivated person, before I started my studies, I had attended two schools at the same time. Both graduated with honors. This taught me to do different types of tasks in the most efficient manner. At the same time I am conscientious. During the study period, I made all the projects on time, each of them passed on the first attempt.
For the company I can offer such features as responsibility and the ability to get an overall view of the project, that is why I often act as a group leader. I can very well manage the time in terms of the tasks assigned to me, but in spite of all the group work is very inspiring to me and I derive great satisfaction from it. I am also the person who can offer you an innovative way of looking at the problem. I always reflect recent trends in my school projects. I can learn new things very quickly, and by this I can improve my skills all the time.
In the spring time I started to look for a company where I would like to apply for an internship. When I found DesignUnit I immediately knew that this is the place where I would like to work. I have not found any company with this kind of specific style and aesthetics incorporated in the design and in the type of the projects - a combination of design and fashion. In this variety of projects I see the art, which is very creative. This is exactly what I would like to learn and do in the future. The most I enjoyed the project called Dansk Magazine Issue 27.
If you are interested in my application, I would be pleased to present my competences during the interview.
Sincerely,
пропозиції роботи
